Hands on stool

This is a much better photo than the other one i critiqued. it tells more of a story but i am lost trying to read it.. all it need for me to read this was a cheeky smile, as if to say, come sit here with me type of thing..... would create much more impact.

the shape you have created is really interesting, naturally the eye is drawn to a circle first, which is the chair, which leads your eye to the hands and framed penis, torso and then finally the eyes. Your lighting is still very flat. are you using off camera flash? is so soften it and create some depth by moving lights around, if you are using a key light, to the left of his body, try putting a large white foam sheet or paper on his right to fill in that shadow under his eye and remove that black eye look.